By Yareli
On Wednesday night Ponyboy Curtis got in a fight with his older brother Darryl. Ponyboy was sad so he run to the park with his friend Johnny. They were sitting on top of the spider web planning on staying to sleep there. When the Socs. arrived at the park. Johnny and Ponyboy hadn't notice that the Socs. were drunk. So they got off the spider web and the Socs. started hitting and drowning Johnny in the fountain. And Ponyboy took out a knife and stabbed one of the Socs. and the rest of them run away
Name of Critic – Angela
ReplyDeletePositive Comments – Is writing about a intresting part of the movie.
Things the author could have done better – Fixed that instead of putting that the socs. were drowning and hitting Johnny put that the socs. were hitting and drowing Ponybboy.
What (if any) items were missing from the blog? She forgot the where and why.
Name of Critic –Lupita
ReplyDeleteAuthor of blog – Yareli
Positive Comments –
I liked your Topic.
Things the author could have done better –
You could have re-read your story and check punctuation and grammar. Next time you might want to be more descriptive and wrote more.
What (if any) items were missing from the blog?
You are missing what and how.
Name of Critic – Nora
ReplyDeleteAuthor of blog – Yareli
Positive Comments – I like the topic she chose.
Things the author could have done better – She could've worked on spelling a little bit, and worked on her punctuation. Also I think her facts are a little off.
What (if any) items were missing from the blog? No items are missing.