By Prestin
The rumble in the pack on Monday the 24
Monday the 24 of July there was rumble in the park. There was about 40 guy but most are unknown the only ones we now that were there was ponyboy, dallas and some of there friends. This toke place in 1968. The greasers and socs have been fighting for years. Ponyboy and Johnny save a lot of kids in a fire. Johnny died like a week later because he got
**Prestin hasn't finished yet.
Name of Critic – Karlie
ReplyDeletePositive Comments – you gave alot of details.
Things the author could have done better – you spelled take wrong you put toke.
What (if any) items were missing from the blog? yes you didnt tell why.
Name of Critic –Lupita
ReplyDeleteAuthor of blog –Prestin
Positive Comments –
I liked your topics.
Things the author could have done better –
You should have been being more descriptive and more focused on one topic instead of three or four topics.
What (if any) items were missing from the blog? You are missing who and where and why and how.
Name of Critic – Nora
ReplyDeleteAuthor of blog – Prestin
Positive Comments – I like the topic(s) he chose...and the font. Haha
Things the author could have done better – He could've used spell check, and he could've worked on his punctuation, and he could've made it longer.
What (if any) items were missing from the blog? I'm not really sure what he's missing because he has information from totally different topics.
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ReplyDeleteName of Critic – Jacob
Author of blog – Prestin
Positive Comments – Some w's missing and 1 h
Things the author could have done better – Spelling