By Isai
Last night October 17 1968 the young Johnny Cade died in Tulsa Oklahoma. It was a terrible accident in a church at Windrexville Oklahoma. There was a fire at church and Jonny and and his two friends went inside to save the kids in the church.
Then the roof that was on fire fell on Johnny's back. The broke his back and he had severe burns. Then jonny was taken to the hospital. When pony boy and dally went to visit him he died. Now funeral is going to be next week.
Name of Critic – Karlie
ReplyDeletePositive Comments – you have every thing that was needed to be in the blog.
Things the author could have done better – it would of been nice if you put a headline.
What (if any) items were missing from the blog? no items were missing from your blog.
Name of Critic – Nora
ReplyDeleteAuthor of blog – Isai
Positive Comments – I like the font. Haha just kidding, I like the topic he chose.
Things the author could have done better – He could've used spell check, and watched his punctuation, and maybe read it over so he could see the words he got mixed up, and the words he doesn't have in the right place.
What (if any) items were missing from the blog?
No items are missing
Name of Critic –Lupita
ReplyDeleteAuthor of blog –Isai
Positive Comments –
Your topic was really good and it was good that you wrote where it Jonny was from.
Things the author could have done better –
I think that your story was a little too short and not detailed enough.It would have been good if you would have re-read your story.
What (if any) items were missing from the blog?
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ReplyDeleteName of Critic – Jacob
Author of blog – Isai
Positive Comments – Good job nothing is missing
Things the author could have done better – headline would be good.
Name of Critic – Jesus
ReplyDeleteAuthor of blog – Isai
Positive Comments – cool man i like the topic.
Name of Critic – Chad B.
ReplyDeleteAuthor of blog – Isai.
Positive Comments –Good job, I loved the post.
Things the author could have done better –
Made a headline, and watch what he types.
What (if any) items were missing from the blog? A headline.
Name of Critic – Nefer
ReplyDeleteAuthor of blog – Isai
Positive Comments – He picked a good topic and he covered the 5 w's told how.
Things the author could have done better – He should have used spell check.
What (if any) items were missing from the blog? None!
Name of Critic – kenneth
ReplyDeleteauthor of blog-isai.
positive comments-It was ok kinda long but and had details